The first mistake you're making is not using the template. Start from that mistake and fix it, improve from what people tell you. If you'll keep making applications like this (Not well written, not using the template, etc.), you will NEVER get accepted. Take mine and others' advice and write a good application and follow the template, show that you care, show that you're helpful, show your knowledge of the rules! Good luck.

The first mistake you're making is not using the template. Start from that mistake and fix it, improve from what people tell you. If you'll keep making applications like this (Not well written, not using the template, etc.), you will NEVER get accepted. Take mine and others' advice and write a good application and follow the template, show that you care, show that you're helpful, show your knowledge of the rules! Good luck.